JaShinYa's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[To save the world you kno]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
First, I have to take points off for the pitch manipulation. Also, the demons and the imp didn't really give a lot for me to judge on. Especially the demons as it was just jibberish. On the other hand, this was a really cool idea. I really wish you could have expanded on this.

Andrew:
I really like this as a concept. Just putting on your headphones and closing your eyes makes this skit really fun to listen to. That being said it really doesn't work for this competition. I can't judge you on range cause all your voices have some kind of filter or alteration to them. Your acting was very good but I really can only judge your acting of the one voice. Very original and I think the concept is friggin' awesome. Story was a bit lacking but that is kind of due to the time limit on a skit like this. I would love to see more work like this from you!

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
holy #%@# your demon impression was freaking creepy. Although your voices and impressions are extremely diffrent from one another. the guardian kind of hogs a majority of the screen time though. Interesting approach to the apocalypse theme, a spirtual being protecting the savior of the world, although a somwhat common concept has never been done in this perspective before. Your tuning and music put you into a sort of trance, its relaxing dispite the horror elements of this submission. This feels like something out of that exmortis game, except you got this relaxing trance along with it.

Rabidssquirrel responds:

Josh: I had been working on a project before I realized the time constraint. I had a half-hour of something completely different. Then I saw the time constraints. Shame on me for only briefly skimming the rules. lol. You're completely right. I thought I thought I was going to get straight up disqualified for unequal parts. I'm sure I could win a Hypnosis/ Journey contest, though ;D Thanks!

Andrew: You're right and such was another reason I was afraid of not even being considered for it. That being said, it was experimental and I decided to take the risk. As for range, I have one, just not in the six hours I had to write and mix this after scraping my original project. Because it's been mentioned before, I may make longer types of things like this. I have a love for hypnotic mind-fucks. Huge thanks for the review!

Bryson: o___o

SimCorder: Why thank you! :D The overall concept was initially to bring the listener into an FPS-like trance, assuming most of the listeners would adapt to the visualizations in their first person view. The gaurdian was that guy over the coms telling the mute protagonist where to go :) Something like that. A hog, yes. Couldn't figure out how to ween other characters in within the amount of time I had left. And I <3 exmortis and am so happy to be related to it :) Thx!

[Apocalyptic Box]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
I feel your evil guys voice could have used more energy and variety of inflection. The heros voice wasn't quite the fit I was thinking. And during the longer dialog it sounded like you were reading dramatically instead of getting into the character and acting.You also might want to find something to kill the reverb. It's not that bad, but it is noticable. The louder lines were also clipping. On the plus side, the elmo voice was pretty spot on and you had very good range among the three voices. The energy and acting did step it up towards the end. Overall, a good job!

Andrew:
I like your evil voice. He had a bunch of great lines and sounded like he could really be enjoying human tartar. Now I wasn't really on board with the Elmo voice I really can't put my finger on it but it just wasn't doing it for me. Your hero's voice just sounded a bit lacking as far as emotional range. He felt like he could have had a more anger in his voice and the 'shot in the leg' scream, while good on the acting side, lacked on the mixing side do to horrible clipping. I did really like the Elmo to evil voice at the end though.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
The acting is very well done, I had no problem telling what emotion or though was going through each character. The heros voice seemed extremely exaggerated, but then again, it might have been what you were aiming for. Voice range is a bit lacking, it seems to me that the heros voice is simply the villan but with a much higher pitched voice, however what kept your score from being really low was that amazing elmo voice. It really stuck out from your other voices. Villains voice, dark and sinister, Heros voice, enuthiastic, Over the top and young. Elmo... oh god.. childish.. and phycho. Do I need to say more? Hero and Villain, a typical story, but how you presented this story is a concept that is rarely used, parodying cliche heroism and the villian knowing exactly how the hero was going to operate is a uncommon idea. Your sound effects, voice tuning and use of music are spot on and perfectly executed. Although I'd like to know how the monster managed to oppress humanity to begin with, the story sets up some really good humor I had quite a few chuckles and laughs with your script. You also managed to string it all together pretty well. I love this idea, the Elmo scene had me laughing my head off, AND HIS VOICE IS SO FREAKY! OH MY GOD! but still, but I still gotta be a critic.

mrbipolar responds:

Thank you all for your reviews. I appreciate the critique and will work on improving in the aforementioned areas. I loved the contest and cannot wait til the next one! In my opinion 8th place ain't bad for a first try. Thanks again!

[Adventures of Jeff and Billy]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
You had a good range, but I didn't really feel that a lot of the voices fit Jesus' voice sounded like a serial killer and Thor just didn't sound authoratative enough. Some voices I'm not sure where they came from. It's an interesting concept having all of the world ending events happening at once, but it was very random and hard to follow. Some of the SFX were loud. Some parts did make me laugh and I think with more orginization and better range, this could have been even better.

Andrew:
I really liked this skit. Way too many voices to keep track of but it worked for me and gave a great example of your range. Your acting was believable and put together rather well. Very original and very well written. I liked the Four Horsemen bit and all of them sounded yet again believable and different. Overall I enjoyed listening to it and I hope to hear more from you.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
Although there was a lot of emotion, it seemed as though you quieted your voice in certain parts of your acting, especially when there was yelling, which took a toll on your acting. There an an amazing range of voices here, from gods, to scientists, robots, soldiers and devils although some sound a bit similar, some are crazily unique. Although some voices fit, others did not, I don't think Jesus would sound so..uh..tough. some people stick with one thing, but you my fellow vict-..er..friend you went with EVERYTHING When is an apocalypse not enough? When you include every single apocolypse into existance.

Loy6 responds:

I made Jesus intentionally not sound like you'd expect Jesus to sound. The original voice I had planned for Jesus was the one that he's normally presented with, soft-spoken and calm. But I thought it would be boring to listen to and sound a little too much like the generic God character at the end. I thought it'd be funny to have Jesus sound like some heavy-set alchoholic smoker. It was my (clearly poorly communicated) attempt at a joke. ~*~ImAgInAtIoN~*~ and all that. Ah well.

And yeah, this wasn't mixed very well. The file got so big it was taking me an entire 30 seconds just to backtrack and listen to a part of it again because of the lag.

When it comes right down to it, this was probably not the best concept to try to tackle within a 6 minute limit. But hey, live and learn. Thanks for the constructive criticism, guys!

[Burnt Hair and Pickles]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
The music was a bit loud. You don't want it to take away from your actual vocals. Also, you had some puffs into your mic. Maybe think about getting a better pop filter. I liked your range and I enjoyed that "droopy" voice. The zombie voices were really good and I really liked this skit in itself!

Andrew:
Overall very good skit. I'm kind of a sucker for just terrible, childish humor and this skit was full of it. The acting was believable even that voice that sounded like he had a mouth full of food. Which I wanted to say didn't work at all for the character but after having listened the the whole skit just sounds exactly like it should. I also love the serious start that quickly takes a 180 about half way through. I didn't mind the Snake voice as much as I though I would as well. Again, overall very amusing.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
The father, or whoever the adult was, his voice seemed to switch from a fatherly figure, to solid snake... what the hell? Other then that your acting was consistant and quite good. All but the narrators voices are unique. The narrator and fathers voices have some similarity, which keeps me from giving a perfect score. I'm not sure how to approach this, the dad turning into snake had me a bit baffled on how to rate his fit. Aside from that each characters voice has a decent fit. It is extremely rare to have an apocalyptic submission where the characters die in the end. or at least in the manner they died from. Excellent sound effects and use of music, added a lot of tension throughout the part where the characters were hiding.. before it went into comedy mode. Backstory definately brings the apocalyse into view, everything makes sense, nothing much to comment on here

SirKillington responds:

Thank you everyone for your reviews. I am really going to take everything you guys said to heart and try to bring something fresh to the table. Thank you for the opportunity and experience that will help shape me into something great :D

[Worst Apocalypse Ever]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
There's not too many things wrong with this one. It's one of my favorites. I think maybe the writing could have been a bit less rediculous (being nitpicky) and the transition whiel driving was a bit off. Overall, I really liked this a lot.

Andrew:
Oh the ending. Got me, you really got me with that one. Ahh, OK the acting was believable and had a comical side to it that worked well with the overall skit. Mixing was very good and added a lot to the skit. Now the acting was very good but it kinda pushed the boarder of being silly and trying to be serious a little to close for me. It sounded like it wanted to just be a funny skit but the little brother incident just felt weird to me. Like it should have been done in a more comical manner if that was the feel you were going for. I did really enjoy listening to it and...oh poptarts...gets me every time.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
Marks voice is hilarious, but there are moments where he sounds like a guy shakespeare, most notibly at the beginning. I commend your zombie acting too. Your voices for the main characters are very unique, however "human" Tims voice resembles Marks somwhat. I tell you, the voices for each character fits their personaility perfectly WERE OUT OF POPTARTS!! (still, zombie apocalypse, its been done quite a bit already) You did an excellent job with your sound effects, especially the ones you made with your own voice, I actually didn't notice when I first heard them. even though your story was so random, you managed to put it together pretty well. When going into a zombie apocalypse, be sure to have poptarts.

TomStheVoice responds:

I am honored that you all enjoyed it. I take all feedback into account, and I will definitely keep what you all said in mind. Thank you very much. :)

[[VAC7] Christmas 2012]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
Acting was pretty great for the most part. A few times it seemed like you were reading from the script. What threw me off the most were your scene transitions. It jumped from one scene to another without something that made it more apparent. Most of these thigns are me being picky because overall, this was really great. The idea was really original and the writing was good. This would have been a good one for the last contest too!

Andrew:
Not a lot of things I can say bad about this. I really like way this whole skit was put together. The only thing I could say was Santa and the General were a bit close to each other and the back and fourth between them made that noticeable. Other than that, just great. Nuff said.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
Your voices have so much character, holy ca-molly. Theres a few similarities here and there, but theres a decent diversity voices. Santa preventing an apocalypse.. NOW THAT IS A BADASS PLOT! Epic music and sound effects. If the general ordered the report of the asteriod to not be released to the public, how the heck did the news get a hold of it? I know there are things like wikileaks, but its not explained. Still, this is a epic story. So that is why polaris is so bright... I'll miss you santa...

[Judgement: Part 1]

VAC7 Coments

Josh:
Comments: I could really see this being the intro of a video game. I like this idea and the writing was great. I think bionic guy's voice could have been cut back a bit with the filter, but that's just being picky because there's not a lot to complain about with this one. Awesome job!

Andrew:
Man, how do I start. This story is well, in one word, enthralling! I just wanted to listen to thiswhole skit after the first 15 seconds. Anything I write here really isn't gonna do much cause I had avery hard time finding something I didn't like about this one. Very good job! Keep doing what you'redoing.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
Although I do find a small resemblence in Jacobs and the leaders voice, jacobs accent counters it pretty well. Andrew, the black cyborg.. where have I seen this before..? moving on, the leaders doubt and lack of confience shows pretty well in his voice so it fits, and Jacobs Captain Price impression is awesome. Greedy evil tyrant, plan that is told won't work but try it anyway, seen it before, but they way you introduced the story adds a original twist, which saves you from a 1 or 3. Nice job on balancing out the radio static with the leaders voice, Andrews robotic tone is a bit strong though, it was to the point where it was hard to understand. On the other hand the background gunshots and explosions greatly added to your submission. Your backstory fits the apocalypse theme, and everything fits together very well. I love the plot you used for your submission, I actually want to be able to hear the rest.

SeiyruRenaih responds:

Thank you guys for all the comments and critiques!

[The Keystone Tradgedy]

Commercial Voice

You have a great commercial voice. Also, this is pretty damn funny. Great job!

SirKillington responds:

Thank you very much! I appreciate the praise, I got a lot of work to go though :D

[Pick-Up Line Collab]

VA's Unite!

Yeah baby! I love it when us voice actors get together for an ultimate vocal chord orgy.

[IC&RS Holiday Special]

Voice Acting Contest 6

"IC & RS Holiday Special" By: ArtellTheWanderer
Acting: 30/35
Fit: 23/25
Originality: 15/15
Range: 11/15
Mixing: 5/10
TOTAL: 84/100
Comments: Not sure if it was your mic or if you were just too close, but throughout most of the recording, the audio was kind of "vibrating" a bit. Main mixing conceern is that you need to lower the background music and SFX. The music especially, was on the verge of overtaking your vocals. Cutting from one music bed to another was a bit off as well. The range wasn't that great. While most of your voices were discernable, they weren't far apart in spectrum. One complaint about the acting is when crap is going down in the skit, the characters should be yelling, not doing that "quiet yell". Also, Crimson Chin much? lol. Overall I enjoyed the skit. Good idea. With better mixing, this could be very very good.

ArtellTheWanderer responds:

Hey man, I appreciate the review. I went into (much) greater detail in FatKid's post, so take a look-see over there for my thoughts. Good luck with your future endeavors!