JaShinYa's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[[VAC8] Static & Steve P.1]

"[VAC8] Static & Steve P.1" by Ockeroid
Acting: 48/50
Range: 25/25
Fit: 24/25
Mixing: 20/20
Originality: 13/15
Writing: 14/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/475347
TOTAL: 144/150
Additional Comments: Good enthusiasm and mixing. The villain wasn't too original nor was the script. It wasn't bad, but i would have liked something more creative. Steven's voice seemed to become more and more slurred as it went on which was kind of strange, but I like the voice overall.

[Super Misadventures!]

"Super Misadventures!" by Jim-Nickabocker
Acting: 50/50
Range: 25/25
Fit: 24/25
Mixing: 19/20
Originality: 14/15
Writing: 15/15
TOTAL: 147/150
Additional Comments: Excellent range and mixing. The villains voice wasn't very original, but the narrator's voice was an excellent idea. Very funny and well written. great emotion and timing in your acting. Naming the other heroes woudl have been great to match the voices to them.

[mother/daughter]

THIS SUCKS!

OMFG DIS SOOKS SO MOUCH!!! I CANNT BELEVE YOU DID VOYCES SO CREPPY!

I love you.

(For real, good stuff. I like the mother's Jewish voice. Maybe just add a bit more texture to the mother's voice to make it sound more old. Great job overall!)

BrickMcRunfast responds:

hahaha, thanks man!! i have another "new yorker" type voice that's more like a heavy smoker, but it's much deeper so I didn't want to use it.

no but seriously it does suck........ i'll do better next time...... PLEASE DON'T HIT ME AGAIN!!

[Tydusis - Doom Cannon VAC7]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:

I'm not going to lie, there's a lot of things wrong with this. First, you mentioned this was improved. Improv is hard to do and in this case it really didn't work out. Next time take some time to write it. Your voices changed on the same character. If you have to explain the actions in your recording, it's probably not very good. The transitions need to be more prevelent and cut out the boring stuff bewteen scenes. The SFX you creted with your voice weren't very good. Overall, it kind of sounded like a kid playing with his action figures.

Andrew:
I really did enjoy listening to this. It was like watching a train derail and crash and blow up and explode and get blasted out of a death laser. If this was done in one take I have to say gratz cause that's exactly what it sounded like. I mean if you were just making up as you went along that's great just this contest wasn't really testing your ability to improvise. If so I would have scored you better but...well it's not.

Bryson:
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SimCorder:
It seemed you tried so hard to make your voice sound like an alien that it took away from your acting. Also your voices lacked consistancy,(your characters voices seemed to change throughout transitions) which isn't good for a voice actor. The voices certainly stood out. However the fact your voices changed so often I had so much difficulty keeping track of which minion was which. The leader is the only voice that is or mostly is conisistant. Despite the confusing acting, your leaders voice fits the part okay. Although you had transitions, its evident that there is no mixing, not to mention I could hear your breathing between lines for most of the submission. Although the events lead up to an apocalypse, it didn't really seem apocalypse related, although I did make a few exceptions here and there, this story doesn't seem to revolve around an apocalypse theme that much. Personal Comment: I dunno what happend, weither it was a lack of rehearsing, or if you rushed the submission. I don't know, but I'd recommend put some more time into making your submissions, it will probably have a large positive impact on your work.

[Apocalypse!!]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
Your accent kind of got in the way. Were yo trying to pronounce "Apocalypse" that way? Once crap started gonig down, things got a bit confusing and the voices were pretty similar. The recording isn't that bad and the acting itself was pretty good. I think someone who scouted you for their animation would be pretty lucky. Good job.

Andrew:
Lots of yelling! I like the music. The voices though are well, kind of lacking. I'm having trouble trying to exactly pinpoint this but they all just don't feel real to me. The toddler was rather amusing and anything with Tom Fulp in it has to be good.

Bryson:
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SimCorder:
Your acting started out a bit weak, but that was probably intentional since it went up a whole level when everything went to hell. Everyones voices fitted their characters personality pretty well, great old man voice, but the commandos voice changed throuhout the beginning and end zombie apocalypse with a newgrounds twist, a bit orginal, but still a zombie apocalypse I'm amazed you managed to do all that screaming without destroying your microphone quality.

[Apocalypse (Voice Contest)]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
I really wish you would have portrayed more emotion with the main character and added more lines for the other 2 voices. Specifically, when she looks at the body and sees her face, I think she's pretty entitled to freak out. It seems like you were concentrating hard on the creepy, melencholy feel (It really worked by the way) but you could have branched out. On the other hand, the whole sad and creepy acting and ambiance was great. I'm really happy to see a female entering this contest and it makes me even happier that you did a great job!

Andrew:
Man I thought this sounded so cool. Just truly haunting. Great acting, amazing originality, sweet writing! Now unfortunately I had to dock points on range due to the lack of lines of your other voices. The rules say you need at least three voices in your skit, now true you had three, but I couldn't really get a feel for your other voices or how well you can do them cause there just wasn't enough to judge you on. I'm sorry but that's just the way I feel about it. Everything else was amazing though. I think your a great voice actor and I hope you continue making great skits like this one!

Bryson:
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SimCorder:
Excellent acting, the emotion in the characters seemed so real, your acting as the survvivor had me very impressed. It was almost as if you saw the events as they transpired. Helen Carters voice and the survivors voice sound almost identical, I actually thought they were the same person in the story. However, since you did well with the little kids voice(even though it was very hard to make out at times without the script) as well as the creepy voice, it kept you from getting a 0. The voices for each character were spot on, nothing stands out in this department. After seeing so many zombie apocalypses both on and off newgrounds. Its refreshing to find an unknown apocalypse, even though it might have been aliens or a meteor... or both... The atmosphere you made with your music WAS AMAZING! I actually felt like I was listening to a recording in the aftermath of the apocalypse. However the static was bit heavy at times and made it hard to understand what the characters were saying at times especially the childs voice. Also the music made it hard to hear the characters as well. Although music greatly adds to any story it shouldn't consume your voices. Although the story had me at the edge of my seat.. some of it didn't really make much sense... why was the surviovr staring at that body to begin with? And where does the creepy voice come in to play on this? Your acting is very well done, thanks for the script, really helped me get the dialog I had trouble understanding.

[Jack & Rory: A Forgotten End]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
The acting in this was kind of anime-ish. A little over the top and whiney. Also, I have to take points off for that pitch manipulation. It's a very original idea and your mixing was perfect. Great job!

Andrew:
Very confusing. I really didn't follow this at all. Sorry if I just totally missed the point completely but it went way over my head. The two first voices sound a lot alike and are hard to distinguish and the acting seemed like it was suppressed almost like you didn't want to give really emotion cause someone was standing in the room judging you. The pit drop on the evil voice was also noticed.

Bryson:
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SimCorder:

Acting is decent, but it doesn't sound entirely natural. There are some similarites in all the voices. However there is evidence you put some effort into making them unique. Jack's confidence and Rorys disorientation are captured perfectly. the thug could of been done a bit better but you still did an awesome job. Your music and sound effects are well implemented. Credits to also tuning the voices for when Rory was dazed and confused. The flashback does give a lot of insight into why Jack and Rory are on the run, but it doesn't entirely cover the apocalypse, but it still works. Also, wouldn't a gunshot have a guy screaming in pain? I know there are instances where somebody can get and not make a sound, but I actually thought Jack died.

[To save the world you kno]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
First, I have to take points off for the pitch manipulation. Also, the demons and the imp didn't really give a lot for me to judge on. Especially the demons as it was just jibberish. On the other hand, this was a really cool idea. I really wish you could have expanded on this.

Andrew:
I really like this as a concept. Just putting on your headphones and closing your eyes makes this skit really fun to listen to. That being said it really doesn't work for this competition. I can't judge you on range cause all your voices have some kind of filter or alteration to them. Your acting was very good but I really can only judge your acting of the one voice. Very original and I think the concept is friggin' awesome. Story was a bit lacking but that is kind of due to the time limit on a skit like this. I would love to see more work like this from you!

Bryson:
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SimCorder:
holy #%@# your demon impression was freaking creepy. Although your voices and impressions are extremely diffrent from one another. the guardian kind of hogs a majority of the screen time though. Interesting approach to the apocalypse theme, a spirtual being protecting the savior of the world, although a somwhat common concept has never been done in this perspective before. Your tuning and music put you into a sort of trance, its relaxing dispite the horror elements of this submission. This feels like something out of that exmortis game, except you got this relaxing trance along with it.

Rabidssquirrel responds:

Josh: I had been working on a project before I realized the time constraint. I had a half-hour of something completely different. Then I saw the time constraints. Shame on me for only briefly skimming the rules. lol. You're completely right. I thought I thought I was going to get straight up disqualified for unequal parts. I'm sure I could win a Hypnosis/ Journey contest, though ;D Thanks!

Andrew: You're right and such was another reason I was afraid of not even being considered for it. That being said, it was experimental and I decided to take the risk. As for range, I have one, just not in the six hours I had to write and mix this after scraping my original project. Because it's been mentioned before, I may make longer types of things like this. I have a love for hypnotic mind-fucks. Huge thanks for the review!

Bryson: o___o

SimCorder: Why thank you! :D The overall concept was initially to bring the listener into an FPS-like trance, assuming most of the listeners would adapt to the visualizations in their first person view. The gaurdian was that guy over the coms telling the mute protagonist where to go :) Something like that. A hog, yes. Couldn't figure out how to ween other characters in within the amount of time I had left. And I <3 exmortis and am so happy to be related to it :) Thx!