JaShinYa's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Take That Ruffians!]

"Take That Ruffians!" by KeepYourDistance
Acting: 26/50
Range: 20/25
Fit: 21/25
Mixing: 14/20
Originality: 15/15
Writing: 9/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/473344
TOTAL: 105/150
Additional Comments: There is background hiss.the narrator would have been better if you could have made him more snooty. goofier and more enthusastic acting would have been great for the villains. I would have worked on your script more instead of ad libbing. Is created odd pauses and took away from the script overall. If this is your first time, it's not too bad. Keep working on the critques and I think you'll do very well in the future. I have to say my favorite voice is the gilbert godfrey villager. Work on your strong voices then start creating different ones!

KeepYourDistance responds:

Thanks for the constructive criticism!

[Extreme Justice Friends~!]

"Extreme Justice Friends~!" by AlmightyPreston
Acting: 36/50
Range: 12/25
Fit: 23/25
Mixing: 11/20
Originality: 11/15
Writing: 13/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/475087
TOTAL: 106/150
Additional Comments: There is a background his that needs filtered out. The voices were very similar sounding and you had some puffs and pops and it sounds like you were bumping the mic. The acting wasn't bad, but I wish you could have shown more emotion. If this is your first time, though, you should be proud of yourself. I can't wait to see you get better!

[Asthma Man!]

"Asthma Man!" by JakeRies50
Acting: 34/50
Range: 23/25
Fit: 19/25
Mixing: 11/20
Originality: 13/15
Writing: 13/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/471782
TOTAL: 113/150
Additional Comments: The dog barking could have been lowered a bit. YOu had some really good range. There was a clear difference between all characters. The geto voice kind of switched from geto to redneck and back to geto. More enthusiasm would have been good. The voices dropped off at times. The city SFX loop wasn't very seamless and you could have turned it down a bit. Mostly just speak up and have more emotion.

[Captain Supreme's bad day]

"Captain Supreme's bad day" by Vert
Acting: 39/50
Range: 15/25
Fit: 19/25
Mixing: 16/20
Originality: 15/15
Writing: 11/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/470595
TOTAL: 115/150
Additional Comments: The first 2 voices were sometimes hard to tell apart. I could hear a slight difference in dialect, but not much. At times, it sounded lie a dramatic reading in the beginning, then it went into the improv and kind of fell apart justa bit. After a minute, the skit picked back up after he started talking about having to get it on with the human centipede. The tempo was a bit choppy with pauses. Maybe make the dialog more snappy? also, there wasn't a resolution. It just kind of cut off.I really liked the premise though. Overall this definitely was an improvement upon your last contest submission. I can't wait to see you continue to get better!

Vert responds:

Thanks, I appreciate the feedback as always.

I agree the voices aren't that different, sadly given my poor range, it's hard for me to improve that much. I deliberately opted for a more 'realistic' dialogue, complete with awkward pauses and all, although it's probably not as fun to hear. Same with the ending.

Again, thanks for the time taking to review; next time I'll put more effort so that I can a submission that's above merely 'adequate'. I owe the judges that much.

^_^

[Acoustic Man]

"Acoustic Man" by SonicWombat
Acting: 41/50
Range: 17/25
Fit: 20/25
Mixing: 13/20
Originality: 13/15
Writing: 14/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/471059
TOTAL: 118/150
Additional Comments: You used your musical talents nicely and created something original! The viallin wasn't very original though and the voice was very phlemy to the point that it took away from the actual voice. This also created a problem with lip smacking sounds and you had some issues with puffs and pops. The hero and narrator were very similar. More emotion would have been great, but the acting was still pretty good. I think if you get yourself a pop filter and hone some of your voices, you'll be a force to be reckoned with!

[SupermanGravy]

"SupermanGravy" by Jaredmachine
Acting: 41/50
Range: 12/25
Fit: 20/25
Mixing: 17/20
Originality: 13/15
Writing: 15/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/473959
TOTAL: 118/150
Additional Comments: I really like the idea with the commerical, though i wish you could have came up with an original superhero. There were some issues with pops in the mic. I like the theme song. The volume could have been pumped a bit. I think you could have embelished the testimonials more because the range wasn't really there. More enthusiasm please!

[Captain Niatcap]

"Captain Niatcap" by Saminat
Acting: 39/50
Range: 21/25
Fit: 21/25
Mixing: 12/20
Originality: 13/15
Writing: 14/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/471627
TOTAL: 120/150
Additional Comments: I like the radio drama idea. I would have lowered the "vocal music" a bit in the beginning. Some parts it sounded like you were reading and there were some long pauses. The fight scene was very radio drama-esque. The villain was unoriginal. The woman and other voice that answered after the hero woke up were very similar. While I do understand that there's a lot of cheesey things and crappy SFX in old radio dramas, I still feel like you could have done more to show off your mixing and acting.

Saminat responds:

Rock on, I really have just started and I know I have a lot to learn that would improve the quality of my submissions. But heck, I had fun making it, and it will be a large learning experience.

[Strongarm's Woman Woes]

"Strongarm's Woman Woes" by TCKnight
Acting: 37/50
Range: 24/25
Fit: 20/25
Mixing: 16/20
Originality: 14/15
Writing: 13/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/474776
TOTAL: 124/150
Additional Comments: Work on your diction. The non hero character sounds like grover with something in his throat. haha. The whole recording was very breathy as well. All the voices were obviously different, but I may work on honing your character voices to make them more clear and unique.

TCKnight responds:

Just took a moment and saw the suggestions. Thanks for the even-handed criticism. There were definitely some things I would have liked to improved, but this was my first attempt and I didn't have a lot of time to work on it/edit it. I'll keep your advice in mind. Thanks again!

[NG Voiceover Contest 8]

"NG Voiceover Contest 8" by DoomedQuaker
Acting: 37/50
Range: 25/25
Fit: 24/25
Mixing: 17/20
Originality: 12/15
Writing: 11/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/475074
TOTAL: 126/150
Additional Comments: You have some reverb problems, and the noise reduction distorts the recording a bit. You have good range, but the main villain wasn't very original. More enthusiasm would have done wonders. I wasn't really sure what was happening in this skit, but overall this wasn't too bad. That's a good meatwad impression, but doesn't help with originality. Impressions are good, but work on some original voices for yourself and don't be afraid to let loose with your emotions.

DoomedQuaker responds:

Thanks for the opportunity and feedback.
I hope to do better next time, even if just a little

[3012]

"3012" by Adam-Beilgard
Acting: 38/50
Range: 20/25
Fit: 24/25
Mixing: 17/20
Originality: 15/15
Writing: 13/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/474987
TOTAL: 127/150
Additional Comments: Next time turn down the ear ringing please. With the kind of drama in this skit, there should have definitely been more emotion. Get into the head of the characters.The range wasn't too bad.The French guy was very blase. Over acting is better than under acting. Especially in drama.

Adam-Beilgard responds:

Will definitely take all that into consideration. Thanks for the feedback!