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[Apocalyptic Box]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
I feel your evil guys voice could have used more energy and variety of inflection. The heros voice wasn't quite the fit I was thinking. And during the longer dialog it sounded like you were reading dramatically instead of getting into the character and acting.You also might want to find something to kill the reverb. It's not that bad, but it is noticable. The louder lines were also clipping. On the plus side, the elmo voice was pretty spot on and you had very good range among the three voices. The energy and acting did step it up towards the end. Overall, a good job!

Andrew:
I like your evil voice. He had a bunch of great lines and sounded like he could really be enjoying human tartar. Now I wasn't really on board with the Elmo voice I really can't put my finger on it but it just wasn't doing it for me. Your hero's voice just sounded a bit lacking as far as emotional range. He felt like he could have had a more anger in his voice and the 'shot in the leg' scream, while good on the acting side, lacked on the mixing side do to horrible clipping. I did really like the Elmo to evil voice at the end though.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
The acting is very well done, I had no problem telling what emotion or though was going through each character. The heros voice seemed extremely exaggerated, but then again, it might have been what you were aiming for. Voice range is a bit lacking, it seems to me that the heros voice is simply the villan but with a much higher pitched voice, however what kept your score from being really low was that amazing elmo voice. It really stuck out from your other voices. Villains voice, dark and sinister, Heros voice, enuthiastic, Over the top and young. Elmo... oh god.. childish.. and phycho. Do I need to say more? Hero and Villain, a typical story, but how you presented this story is a concept that is rarely used, parodying cliche heroism and the villian knowing exactly how the hero was going to operate is a uncommon idea. Your sound effects, voice tuning and use of music are spot on and perfectly executed. Although I'd like to know how the monster managed to oppress humanity to begin with, the story sets up some really good humor I had quite a few chuckles and laughs with your script. You also managed to string it all together pretty well. I love this idea, the Elmo scene had me laughing my head off, AND HIS VOICE IS SO FREAKY! OH MY GOD! but still, but I still gotta be a critic.

mrbipolar responds:

Thank you all for your reviews. I appreciate the critique and will work on improving in the aforementioned areas. I loved the contest and cannot wait til the next one! In my opinion 8th place ain't bad for a first try. Thanks again!

[Burnt Hair and Pickles]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
The music was a bit loud. You don't want it to take away from your actual vocals. Also, you had some puffs into your mic. Maybe think about getting a better pop filter. I liked your range and I enjoyed that "droopy" voice. The zombie voices were really good and I really liked this skit in itself!

Andrew:
Overall very good skit. I'm kind of a sucker for just terrible, childish humor and this skit was full of it. The acting was believable even that voice that sounded like he had a mouth full of food. Which I wanted to say didn't work at all for the character but after having listened the the whole skit just sounds exactly like it should. I also love the serious start that quickly takes a 180 about half way through. I didn't mind the Snake voice as much as I though I would as well. Again, overall very amusing.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
The father, or whoever the adult was, his voice seemed to switch from a fatherly figure, to solid snake... what the hell? Other then that your acting was consistant and quite good. All but the narrators voices are unique. The narrator and fathers voices have some similarity, which keeps me from giving a perfect score. I'm not sure how to approach this, the dad turning into snake had me a bit baffled on how to rate his fit. Aside from that each characters voice has a decent fit. It is extremely rare to have an apocalyptic submission where the characters die in the end. or at least in the manner they died from. Excellent sound effects and use of music, added a lot of tension throughout the part where the characters were hiding.. before it went into comedy mode. Backstory definately brings the apocalyse into view, everything makes sense, nothing much to comment on here

SirKillington responds:

Thank you everyone for your reviews. I am really going to take everything you guys said to heart and try to bring something fresh to the table. Thank you for the opportunity and experience that will help shape me into something great :D

[Worst Apocalypse Ever]

VAC7 Comments

Josh:
There's not too many things wrong with this one. It's one of my favorites. I think maybe the writing could have been a bit less rediculous (being nitpicky) and the transition whiel driving was a bit off. Overall, I really liked this a lot.

Andrew:
Oh the ending. Got me, you really got me with that one. Ahh, OK the acting was believable and had a comical side to it that worked well with the overall skit. Mixing was very good and added a lot to the skit. Now the acting was very good but it kinda pushed the boarder of being silly and trying to be serious a little to close for me. It sounded like it wanted to just be a funny skit but the little brother incident just felt weird to me. Like it should have been done in a more comical manner if that was the feel you were going for. I did really enjoy listening to it and...oh poptarts...gets me every time.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
Marks voice is hilarious, but there are moments where he sounds like a guy shakespeare, most notibly at the beginning. I commend your zombie acting too. Your voices for the main characters are very unique, however "human" Tims voice resembles Marks somwhat. I tell you, the voices for each character fits their personaility perfectly WERE OUT OF POPTARTS!! (still, zombie apocalypse, its been done quite a bit already) You did an excellent job with your sound effects, especially the ones you made with your own voice, I actually didn't notice when I first heard them. even though your story was so random, you managed to put it together pretty well. When going into a zombie apocalypse, be sure to have poptarts.

TomStheVoice responds:

I am honored that you all enjoyed it. I take all feedback into account, and I will definitely keep what you all said in mind. Thank you very much. :)

[Judgement: Part 1]

VAC7 Coments

Josh:
Comments: I could really see this being the intro of a video game. I like this idea and the writing was great. I think bionic guy's voice could have been cut back a bit with the filter, but that's just being picky because there's not a lot to complain about with this one. Awesome job!

Andrew:
Man, how do I start. This story is well, in one word, enthralling! I just wanted to listen to thiswhole skit after the first 15 seconds. Anything I write here really isn't gonna do much cause I had avery hard time finding something I didn't like about this one. Very good job! Keep doing what you'redoing.

Bryson:
None

SimCorder:
Although I do find a small resemblence in Jacobs and the leaders voice, jacobs accent counters it pretty well. Andrew, the black cyborg.. where have I seen this before..? moving on, the leaders doubt and lack of confience shows pretty well in his voice so it fits, and Jacobs Captain Price impression is awesome. Greedy evil tyrant, plan that is told won't work but try it anyway, seen it before, but they way you introduced the story adds a original twist, which saves you from a 1 or 3. Nice job on balancing out the radio static with the leaders voice, Andrews robotic tone is a bit strong though, it was to the point where it was hard to understand. On the other hand the background gunshots and explosions greatly added to your submission. Your backstory fits the apocalypse theme, and everything fits together very well. I love the plot you used for your submission, I actually want to be able to hear the rest.

SeiyruRenaih responds:

Thank you guys for all the comments and critiques!

[The Keystone Tradgedy]

Commercial Voice

You have a great commercial voice. Also, this is pretty damn funny. Great job!

SirKillington responds:

Thank you very much! I appreciate the praise, I got a lot of work to go though :D

[IC&RS Holiday Special]

Voice Acting Contest 6

"IC & RS Holiday Special" By: ArtellTheWanderer
Acting: 30/35
Fit: 23/25
Originality: 15/15
Range: 11/15
Mixing: 5/10
TOTAL: 84/100
Comments: Not sure if it was your mic or if you were just too close, but throughout most of the recording, the audio was kind of "vibrating" a bit. Main mixing conceern is that you need to lower the background music and SFX. The music especially, was on the verge of overtaking your vocals. Cutting from one music bed to another was a bit off as well. The range wasn't that great. While most of your voices were discernable, they weren't far apart in spectrum. One complaint about the acting is when crap is going down in the skit, the characters should be yelling, not doing that "quiet yell". Also, Crimson Chin much? lol. Overall I enjoyed the skit. Good idea. With better mixing, this could be very very good.

ArtellTheWanderer responds:

Hey man, I appreciate the review. I went into (much) greater detail in FatKid's post, so take a look-see over there for my thoughts. Good luck with your future endeavors!

[Dear Santa]

Voice Acting Contest 6

"Dear Santa" By: FreyasDaughter
Acting: 29/35
Fit: 21/25
Originality: 13/15
Range: 10/15
Mixing: 6/10
TOTAL: 79/100
Comments: First off, I'm very happy to hear a female joining in for once! With that said, on to business. First thing I noticed was the volume. When you edit, crank up the volume. If it's not hurting your ears, you need to adjust the gain. The other thing with your mixing was the puffs and pops. Either make a pop screen or back up. While I could tell the difference between the kids, it didn't show off your range. I'd like to see a wider variety. Your acting was a bit robotic at times... add some spice! Enthusiasm and letting go are key. However, you should also wtch your diction. Take your time while acting your lines. Overall this was pretty good. I hope to see what you have in store for the future. Keep improving! (I Hope you get a pox? lol)

FreyasDaughter responds:

Thanks for the review! I really appreciate your input and will try to implement it in the future. Yeah, when I made this, I still didn't have a pop screen. (Still don't, just some tissue paper over a wonky metal hanger.) And am I really the only female to do a voice acting contest? That's curious, since there are plenty of female voice actors on the site. Anyway, thanks for the review, appreciate the feedback, and appreciate the decent score! (I honestly thought it'd be lower, but my self esteem sucks, so this is a pleasant surprise!)

[Little Timmy's Christmas Story]

Voice Acting Contest 6

"Little Timmy's Christmas Story" By: Seymour
Acting: 32/35
Fit: 23/25
Originality: 14/15
Range: 13/15
Mixing: 7/10
TOTAL: 89/100
Comments: A couple of complaints in the recording. One, work on diction a bit. Some of the words drop or are mumbled. Also, there were audible clicks when you stopped recording and started again. The only other major complaint is the news part at the end- The background music wasn't needed, and the anchor's voice wasn't much different from the narrator's. Overall, I liked the skit. I would have liked to hear more. This was less than 3:00. Good acting, clear for the most part, and a pretty original idea. Thumbs up!

PM-Seymour responds:

Thank you very much for the input :)