JaShinYa's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Ngvac Antr, Radio Show]

"Ngvac Antr, Radio Show" by KeepYourDistance*

******MOST ORIGINAL*******

Acting- 42/50
Range- 23/25
Fit- 20/25
Mixing- 14/20
Originality- 15/15
Writing- 14/15
TOTAL- 128/150

Comments: There was some dead air and background noise from the computer. There was also minor reverb from the room. The stereo balance was off a bit. I would have chosen a slightly different voice for the DJ; it just didn't sit right with me. I really liked Gilbert (Godfrey?). Dj should have been more smooth in transitions like an actual DJ. Some of his lines sounded a bit like awkward improv. I would have used a phone hang up effect instead of the static. Bane's voice wasn't too bad, but not as powerful as it should have been. DJ's voice changed at beginning of burglar call. Burglar 1 was good. I could hear a potentially excellent mad scientist voice in you. Not a bad skit over all and it was a really good idea. Overall, there are several small things that you could fix, but once those are made better, I think you could be a great talent.

KeepYourDistance responds:

holy shit

[VA Contest 9 Submission]

JaShinYa

Acting- 43/50
Range- 23/25
Fit- 23/25
Mixing- 20/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 13/15
TOTAL- 136/150

This entry has great mixing and use of SFX. At one point the orc's voice slipped into a redneck-ish voice. I would have liked to hear more emotional range from Cletus and the main guy. At times you had a bit of a William Shatner complex in your acting meaning some of your reading had an odd rhythem to it and many of the lines had inflections that could have been varied more. Not really bad acting as it fit your particular skit for the most part, but it would have brought your characters to life. It's hard to explain, so if you don't get what I'm saying, let me know and maybe I can try to explain it better. You have an awesome narrator's voice; I'd recommend it to anyone. It sounded very similar to the leader's voice, however, which brings you down a bit in this contest. Overall, your quality is excellent. As far as this contest goes, I need to hear more emotion (great voice for a radioplay or audio book though). I'd like to hear the whole story of this, because i was bit confused at first as to what was exactly happening. "How shitty" gave me a good chuckle. I really hope to hear more from you in the future!
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Treg

Acting: 47/50
Range: 24/25
Fit: 25/25
Mixing: 20/20
Originality: 14/15
Writing: 15/15
TOTAL: 145/150

Additional Comments: Great mic quality. Loved echo effect and cave ambience. Great job working fantasy adventure into this horrible job theme. Or.. maybe I mean the other way around? It's written like an audio drama series. I'm actually kind of interested in hearing this continued. Excellent range of characters.
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mrbipolar

Acting: 45
Range: 24
Fit: 5
Mixing: 20
Originality: 13
Writing: 14
Total: 121

Review: Let me start by saying that your mixing was very well done. I can not find any issues with it to critique on. To add, I think that your acting good and I could feel where your characters were coming from, however the orc needed just a tad bit more to sell me on his character. Now as far as writing is concerned it was pretty good not perfect but good. the originality was not bad either. However, I do not feel that it fit the theme very well. Sure the job ended badly, and it was bad that the ruler knew that there was no ore to be found, but I personally don't feel that the main character had a pretty good point, easiest money you can make. Overall not a bad piece at all. In fact I liked it, but I have to be a judge.
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SimCorder

Acting[45/50]
Range[23/25]
Fit[22/25]
Mixing[20/20]
Originality[12/15]
Writing[13/15]
Total[135/150]

Excellent acting, decent accents, Either these adventurers are either very brave, or they can't express fear, and nice touch with Cletus's drunkeness. the narrator and Miraeon sounded similar to each other, but you put a lot of effort into Cletus and Thrum though, it shows. Everyones fit was perfect, Thrum though, I didn't really realize he was an Orc until it was pointed out, I thought he was a viking or barbarian at first. Some EPIC mixing here, I realized they were in a cave/tunnel almost instantly. Although this is original.. doesn't exactly imply.. "Most horrible job", also, the protection wimping out after the threat is discovered.. kinda cliche. The story is amazing, but this doesn't exactly apply as.. "Most horrible job" in my book, but I guess I can't be cruel since Jinsha didn't disqualify you. The plot was interesting, but it felt kind of anti climatic, however it is still well thought out.

Obsidiaguy responds:

Thanks for these. I really appreciate all of the judges taking the time to critique. Good feedback for sure.

[Misadventures of Mouseboy]

"Misadventures of Mouseboy" by bustersquash
Acting: 19/50
Range: 21/25
Fit: 22/25
Mixing: 6/20
Originality: 9/15
Writing: 10/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/472317
DQ'd
Additional Comments: There is a major background hiss and you have a bunch of puffs and pops. instead of doing this all in one take, i would break up your lines and mix them together later. i saw you only put an hour's worth of work into this. If you want to put out a quality recording, you'll have to put in more work than that. You did have a clear distinction between your voices. However I am going to have to Disqualify you for not meeting the criteria for submission length.

bustersquash responds:

I understand thanks for your input and listening, also this was my first submission and since this i have gotten new software that can remove the hiss and pops

[Take That Ruffians!]

"Take That Ruffians!" by KeepYourDistance
Acting: 26/50
Range: 20/25
Fit: 21/25
Mixing: 14/20
Originality: 15/15
Writing: 9/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/473344
TOTAL: 105/150
Additional Comments: There is background hiss.the narrator would have been better if you could have made him more snooty. goofier and more enthusastic acting would have been great for the villains. I would have worked on your script more instead of ad libbing. Is created odd pauses and took away from the script overall. If this is your first time, it's not too bad. Keep working on the critques and I think you'll do very well in the future. I have to say my favorite voice is the gilbert godfrey villager. Work on your strong voices then start creating different ones!

KeepYourDistance responds:

Thanks for the constructive criticism!

[Captain Supreme's bad day]

"Captain Supreme's bad day" by Vert
Acting: 39/50
Range: 15/25
Fit: 19/25
Mixing: 16/20
Originality: 15/15
Writing: 11/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/470595
TOTAL: 115/150
Additional Comments: The first 2 voices were sometimes hard to tell apart. I could hear a slight difference in dialect, but not much. At times, it sounded lie a dramatic reading in the beginning, then it went into the improv and kind of fell apart justa bit. After a minute, the skit picked back up after he started talking about having to get it on with the human centipede. The tempo was a bit choppy with pauses. Maybe make the dialog more snappy? also, there wasn't a resolution. It just kind of cut off.I really liked the premise though. Overall this definitely was an improvement upon your last contest submission. I can't wait to see you continue to get better!

Vert responds:

Thanks, I appreciate the feedback as always.

I agree the voices aren't that different, sadly given my poor range, it's hard for me to improve that much. I deliberately opted for a more 'realistic' dialogue, complete with awkward pauses and all, although it's probably not as fun to hear. Same with the ending.

Again, thanks for the time taking to review; next time I'll put more effort so that I can a submission that's above merely 'adequate'. I owe the judges that much.

^_^

[Captain Niatcap]

"Captain Niatcap" by Saminat
Acting: 39/50
Range: 21/25
Fit: 21/25
Mixing: 12/20
Originality: 13/15
Writing: 14/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/471627
TOTAL: 120/150
Additional Comments: I like the radio drama idea. I would have lowered the "vocal music" a bit in the beginning. Some parts it sounded like you were reading and there were some long pauses. The fight scene was very radio drama-esque. The villain was unoriginal. The woman and other voice that answered after the hero woke up were very similar. While I do understand that there's a lot of cheesey things and crappy SFX in old radio dramas, I still feel like you could have done more to show off your mixing and acting.

Saminat responds:

Rock on, I really have just started and I know I have a lot to learn that would improve the quality of my submissions. But heck, I had fun making it, and it will be a large learning experience.

[Strongarm's Woman Woes]

"Strongarm's Woman Woes" by TCKnight
Acting: 37/50
Range: 24/25
Fit: 20/25
Mixing: 16/20
Originality: 14/15
Writing: 13/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/474776
TOTAL: 124/150
Additional Comments: Work on your diction. The non hero character sounds like grover with something in his throat. haha. The whole recording was very breathy as well. All the voices were obviously different, but I may work on honing your character voices to make them more clear and unique.

TCKnight responds:

Just took a moment and saw the suggestions. Thanks for the even-handed criticism. There were definitely some things I would have liked to improved, but this was my first attempt and I didn't have a lot of time to work on it/edit it. I'll keep your advice in mind. Thanks again!

[NG Voiceover Contest 8]

"NG Voiceover Contest 8" by DoomedQuaker
Acting: 37/50
Range: 25/25
Fit: 24/25
Mixing: 17/20
Originality: 12/15
Writing: 11/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/475074
TOTAL: 126/150
Additional Comments: You have some reverb problems, and the noise reduction distorts the recording a bit. You have good range, but the main villain wasn't very original. More enthusiasm would have done wonders. I wasn't really sure what was happening in this skit, but overall this wasn't too bad. That's a good meatwad impression, but doesn't help with originality. Impressions are good, but work on some original voices for yourself and don't be afraid to let loose with your emotions.

DoomedQuaker responds:

Thanks for the opportunity and feedback.
I hope to do better next time, even if just a little

[3012]

"3012" by Adam-Beilgard
Acting: 38/50
Range: 20/25
Fit: 24/25
Mixing: 17/20
Originality: 15/15
Writing: 13/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/474987
TOTAL: 127/150
Additional Comments: Next time turn down the ear ringing please. With the kind of drama in this skit, there should have definitely been more emotion. Get into the head of the characters.The range wasn't too bad.The French guy was very blase. Over acting is better than under acting. Especially in drama.

Adam-Beilgard responds:

Will definitely take all that into consideration. Thanks for the feedback!

[Superhero Contest Skit]

"Superhero Contest Skit" by Dothelala
Acting: 38/50
Range: 25/25
Fit: 23/25
Mixing: 16/20
Originality: 14/15
Writing: 14/15
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/474988
TOTAL: 130/150
Additional Comments: Raise the volume some. When Mercy man yelled in the beginning, it wasn't very convincing.I would have used an echo the wasn't as strong. It sounded like they were in a gym instead of an interrigation room.I want to hear more emotion from the hero and more anger from the cops.

Dothelala responds:

Thanks for the review JaShinYa! I should have definitely used less reverb in the project, it was kind of distracting. I will raise the voulume in my future projects and I'll also make the characters sound more convincing. Thanks again for the review, I will take it to heart.