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[A Night to Remember - GD]

"A Night to Remember - GD" by HeliosRise*

Acting- /50
Range- /25
Fit- /25
Mixing- /20
Originality- /15
Writing- /15
TOTAL- DQ/150

Comments: You have some dead air behind your recording. I really liked your announcer's voice however I wasn't really feeling the opponent's voice. It was lacking authority and power. The same happened with several of the other characters. Your mixing wasn't bad and you had very good range. Overall, the biggest thing you need to work on is emotion. your acting is very natural and you have talent, but the more emotional lines need to get pumped up to the max. Unfortunately I had to DQ you due to going over the time limit

[A Night to Remember Entry]

"A Night to Remember Entry" by wardogblacky*

Acting- 39/50
Range- 19/25
Fit- 22/25
Mixing- 14/20
Originality- 11/15
Writing- 12/15
TOTAL- 117/150

Comments: You had some slight reverb and dead air. Pretty minor though. The background music and SFX almost drowned out your voice at times. The acting in between the narration was a bit hokey, not very natural. The best acting came during your "reenactment" with gollum. That was a pretty decent gollum impression, but in these contests it's usually a good idea to do original voices because people tend to always do the same ones. Just leading up to your entry I've heard 3 gollum impersonations. I did like the actual narration voice. It was a good style choice and I could hear that narrating a video game or a kids' audio book. Overall, make sure you keep all of your characters natural sounding. It seemed like you stayed in the same style as the narrator for all of them except for the gollums. Also be aware of your levels with any background music and SFX.

[MMO - The Musical]

"MMO - The Musical" by FoxPirate715*

Acting- 37/50
Range- 23/25
Fit- 24/25
Mixing- 15/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 10/15
TOTAL- 123/150

Comments: There is some dead air that bleeds through, especially when the music stops. Also, it's a little awkward when the music abruptly stops so to fix that you usually want some sort of audio cue as to why it stopped (for example: a record scratch). This is the second musical entry I've heard in this competition and there's like I told the other VA, these can be hard to judge since singing lines drastically changes the acting. I gave the other a better acting score for 2 main reasons- He concentrated on making the music parts sound more acting-centric where as yours seemed like you were really concentrating on making the music sound good which isn't what this contest is about. The other reason is all around, the acting seemed more like you were just reading lines. There was emotion, but you didn't really get into the characters' heads. Lastly, during the contrapuntal the voices kind of got lost in each other. The things I liked about this is that you have a great voice; singing and acting-wise. It was also pretty good range which tends to be particularly hard for newer female VAs Overall, I think you have a lot of potential. I'd really like to hear something with only acting for the next contest and in the mean time, work on getting into your character. Overact! A lot of times, if it seems like you're going over the top, you're probably not. If you are, it's easier to tone it down than to dial it up.

[A Night to Remember]

"A Night to Remember" by TheCartooningMaster*

Acting- 37/50
Range- 19/25
Fit- 19/25
Mixing- 17/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 13/15
TOTAL- 119/150

Comments: The narrator/announcer voice in the beginning really didn't fit. There's also a different way to read narrative parts from character parts. The narrator was also the same voice as "bird" (or burt?) You had some puffs into the mic, but mixing was decent overall. Sometimes stumbling over your words can work as improv, but there were a couple moments here where it didn't. Overall, work on expanding your vocal range, invest in a pop filter and take care to really get into your characters as well as being careful with script reading.

TheCartooningMaster responds:

Now that's what I call constructive criticism! You can bet I'm gonna practice even more to get better in the future. And a pop filter is next on my to buy list. Thanks for the review!

[A weird Night to remember]

"A weird Night to remember" by ShoZ*

Acting- 24/50
Range- 22/25
Fit- 19/25
Mixing- 11/20
Originality- 11/15
Writing- 12/15
TOTAL- 99/150

Comments: YOu have some reverb and background computer noise in the recording and you clipped the audio a few times.You also had some puffs in the mic. The rain and club SFX were a bit loud and made it hard to hear your voice. The narrator's voice changed at the end. Overall, you actually had a pretty decent American sounding accent. Next time you record a skit, try to overact as much as possible because there wasn't too much emotion in this one. It sounded like you were just reading a script. A lot of times if you're overacting, you're really not... and if you are, it's easier to tone it down than to dial it up. PS: This didn't hurt your score but Instead of "injection", the word you're looking for is "syringe". Figured I would let you know for the future!

Shozi responds:

hey thanks alot for that review! im lookin forward to get better =D thank you very much !

[A Night to Remember]

"A Night to Remember" by moonvamp*******************4th

*****BEST ACTING********

Acting- 50/50
Range- 24/25
Fit- 25/25
Mixing- 18/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 9/15
TOTAL- 140/150

Comments: There is some background noise from your computer and some dead air as well. Very good job getting the energy needed to make the characters come to life. The voices were great. I was a little confused as to what was going on. Correct me if I'm wrong, a hero gets into a trap, the villain has sharp body hair and is trying to get rid of it then dies by getting grinded by his thug and the sidekick gets turned into a peach? Lastly, I can see why this would be a memorable night, but it didn't seem like the central theme of the skit. Overall, getting acquainted with some good sound removal software may do some good for you. Other than that you did a great job!

moonvamp responds:

Thank you. I will have to get introduced to some sound removal software for any future recordings. As for the plot, it's basically this:

The heroes, Stimey Buttons and Rocko, are caught in a trap set up by Plushie McGee. Plushie has been frustrated with how his body hair is so hideously sharp, and how everyone he happens to meet tells him he's a peach (which he despises peach). So, he made a ray gun to turn everyone within the town limits into peaches that have even more hideous and sharper body hair. Rocko questions his logic and gets bitch-slapped by him using a dog. So, as Plushie goes to prepare the gun, he leaves Dr. Gravis, his henchman with the cheese grinder hand, to finish off the heroes. He decides to use a cat that can cough up an acid hairball lazer. As Dr. Gravis is distracted by his love for hefty women from his magazine and Rocko wakes up, Stimey finds a way to escape from their predicament by finding out the bar supports are on the verge of breaking. Rocko then finds a good distraction for the cat by finding cat nip (Stimey's supposed future meal) in Stimey's pockets. Stimey is able to reach the cat nip, and the cat stops his catball barrage by approaching the duo. The cat soon salivates acid at a slow pace from the cat nip, melting the hand cuffs of the trap just in time for Stimey to break his hands free. He punches the cat, and thrusts his body to try and break the bar supports. Eventually they do, and the duo are soon free. Plushie sees them, and calls for Dr. Gravis. Dr. Gravis is so fixated on his Hefty Honeys magazine that he tries to *place sexual act here*. However, he uses his cheese grinder hand, and his *special place* is in pain. Dr. Gravis soon approaches Plushie with his stuck cheese grinder hand, and as it breaks free, the cheese grinder hand goes out of control and slices them both. Stimey sees that all Plushie needed to do for another alternative was to use Dr. Gravis's cheese grinder hand since his body hair was immediately trimmed off in the grueling process. While they were distracted, Rocko went straight for the ray guy and halts it from firing upon the town. However, it also malfunctioned and turned him into a peach with supposedly sharp body hair. Screams then ensure.

Well, that was basically the gist of it.

[A Night To Remember!]

"A Night To Remember!" by Ragnar4200*

******BEST FIT*******

Acting- 49/50
Range- 25/25
Fit- 25/25
Mixing- 17/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 10/15
TOTAL- 140/150

Comments: There was a bit of dead air and a little bit of clipping. I loved the diversity in your voices. The computer was definitely my favorite. Great job with getting into your characters. As far as acting goes, the only thing I would change is adding more "umph" into the yelling by Sato. Lastly, I could see that it would have been a memorable night, but it didn't seem like the main theme o the skit. Other than those few minor things there wasn't a whole lot to complain about. My biggest suggestion would be to turn down the gain using a preamp or use a mic with a sound pad built in. Great job!

Ragnar4200 responds:

I'll be sure to take your criticisms and apply them for the next VO Contest. It was a lot of fun and I look forward to doing more in the future! :D

[A night to remember]

"A night to remember" by tokenlad*

Acting- 29/50
Range- 17/25
Fit- 21/25
Mixing- 12/20
Originality- 13/15
Writing- 11/15
TOTAL- 103/150

Comments: There was background noise from your computer along with a lot of reverb and breath in the mic. This sounded like parts of this were done in single takes. Lou and the boss sounded pretty similar other than the accents so it tended to be hard to follow at times. The acting sounded more schizophrenic due to the single takes. Overall, this would have done well with some background music. I would also suggest setting up a better recording area with some sound padding and a mic stand so you don't have to sit. The biggest suggestion is to record your lines separately.

[Zane's Night To Remember]

"Zane's Night To Remember" by JayMyers*

Acting- 39/50
Range- 20/25
Fit- 23/25
Mixing- 14/20
Originality- 13/15
Writing- 14/15
TOTAL- 123/150

Comments: There was a ton of clipping and pops and reverb. To be honest I'm not sure what the hell I just listened to. haha. There was definitely energy here. The best voice was Roger. There wasn't a whole lot to this. Overall, it wasn't bad on acting, but I really would have liked to heard some more diverse voices rather than you in different falsettos. Maybe next time try something that involves more character acting and mixing. PS: is your accent from Boston, Australia, Ireland or...? PPS: Zane's a dick. lol

JayMyers responds:

Thanks; as for as my accent goes, I have no clue. It's like a mix. If you're wondering where I'm actually from, it's Wales. Oh, and yeah, Zane is meant to be the lowest of the low.

[a night to remember]

"a night to remember" by aHOBO196*

Acting- /50
Range- /25
Fit- /25
Mixing- /20
Originality- /15
Writing- /15
TOTAL- DQ/150

Comments: There were a lot of mouth noises and background noise. Good effort on the acting, but it was pretty unemotional for the most part. Narration can be hard to do well, especially for the first time. It's also not really a good idea for a competition since narration tends to be very level toned. It's hard to judge for acting. Instead of mixing the voices into it like you're telling a story over a camp fire, it would be better to narrate, then cut into the scene... for example talk like an older guy telling a story, then cut in with the character's younger voice along with the other characters. It was done like an audio book and all in one take except you tripped over your words and mumbled several times. The voices were very similar save for the accent. Lastly I'll have to DQ this since I did not hear at least 3 different voices. Overall, try practicing with some non-narrative scripts and make sure to get as much emotion in as possible. Overact as much as you can. It's always easier to tone it down, than to dial it up. Also, to help with the mouth noises, back up from the mic when you record and invest in a pop screen.