JaShinYa's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Cat in a dryer]

Good. My weekly cat budget will be put to better use now!

mrbipolar responds:

Glad I could be of some assistance!

[A Night to Remember]

"A Night to Remember" by SourJovis*

Acting- 22/50
Range- 10/25
Fit- 17/25
Mixing- 17/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 11/15
TOTAL- 91/150

Comments: You had some dead air in the recording. I get that the first voice was supposed to be a geek, but it would have been much better with more over the top life breathed into him more like the female voice instead of the monotone read. "Maria" had similar reads unfortunately, and I think what you were trying to do was make it sound ascetic in a romantic way, but it would have been much better if you had gone crazier with the voices. Also, 3 of the 4 voices you did were very similar to each other. Overall, you showed a glimpse of how you could act with energy with the first female voice and I would like to hear more of that in the future. Also work on broadening your range.

SourJovis responds:

Thank you for the response. As an audio only piece it would be better without the silences I agree. I always do that, but I receive a lot of complaints that it's too fast and noisy, and how silence is part of the acting. I left the silences in this time to enhance the acting performance, but I got only a 22/50 for acting so that obviously didn't work. No no, I wasn't going for "ascetic in a romantic way" at all. More like unfemininely deep, but someone who THINKS he/she is sultry. My acting really sucks. Sorry for that. Most people say my voices are too cartoony and fake, and that it's just a trick to make them sound different. Honestly I think they're right. You can't do any serious acting with unnatural voices. I don't see well respected actors like Sean Penn, Mads Mikkelsen or Javier Bardem do a 100 different voices. They do a voice much like they naturally have, but in a way that portrays the emotions appropriate to the character they play. There are actors who can do a 100 voices, like Dan Castellaneta and Seth MacFarlane which is a skill indeed, but I don't see them win a Palme d'Or to be honest (no offence). I tried to keep the characters subtle and believable because that's the only way I can seriously act. However, apparently I can neither act nor portray characters. Oh well...

[A Bad Night to Remember]

"A Bad Night to Remember" by BrutalSurvivor*

Acting- 19/50
Range- 18/25
Fit- 17/25
Mixing- 9/20
Originality- 11/15
Writing- 9/15
TOTAL- 83/150

Comments: You had a lot of background noise and it sounded like you recorded from the inside of a cabinet. Your acting was a little dull. For example, if a guy pulled a gun on you how would YOU sound? You can also find free SFX online instead of making your own. Unless I missed it, I don't think you added a gunshot in so I almost didn't even realize what just happened. As far as reading your lines go, make sure to enunciate. Overall, work on completely letting loose with your acting and look for the SFX you need online.

BrutalSurvivor responds:

thanks for your opinion on me. :P

[The Spelling Bee]

"The Spelling Bee" by Himynameisjacob***************3rd

Acting- 50/50
Range- 24/25
Fit- 25/25
Mixing- 18/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 10/15
TOTAL- 141/150

Comments: My favorite voice by far is the first kid. I could just see some little snot-nosed retard standing up there. This whole recording was very well rounded. The biggest thing I would fix is that it sounds like you used sound removal because there is a slight distortion to your audio. On a writing standpoint, I can see that it could be a night to remember but I didn't get that the theme was central to your entry.

Jacob responds:

Man, so I lost up to five points on how well I fit the theme?
And to think two more points would have won me the contest!
But I'm not complaining. It was a last minute submission, and I like to think I did pretty well.

Thanks a load for hosting this competition!
It was a great experience, and the introduction for me to an even greater community.

[A Night to Remember]

"A Night to Remember" by TheCartooningMaster*

Acting- 37/50
Range- 19/25
Fit- 19/25
Mixing- 17/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 13/15
TOTAL- 119/150

Comments: The narrator/announcer voice in the beginning really didn't fit. There's also a different way to read narrative parts from character parts. The narrator was also the same voice as "bird" (or burt?) You had some puffs into the mic, but mixing was decent overall. Sometimes stumbling over your words can work as improv, but there were a couple moments here where it didn't. Overall, work on expanding your vocal range, invest in a pop filter and take care to really get into your characters as well as being careful with script reading.

TheCartooningMaster responds:

Now that's what I call constructive criticism! You can bet I'm gonna practice even more to get better in the future. And a pop filter is next on my to buy list. Thanks for the review!

[A weird Night to remember]

"A weird Night to remember" by ShoZ*

Acting- 24/50
Range- 22/25
Fit- 19/25
Mixing- 11/20
Originality- 11/15
Writing- 12/15
TOTAL- 99/150

Comments: YOu have some reverb and background computer noise in the recording and you clipped the audio a few times.You also had some puffs in the mic. The rain and club SFX were a bit loud and made it hard to hear your voice. The narrator's voice changed at the end. Overall, you actually had a pretty decent American sounding accent. Next time you record a skit, try to overact as much as possible because there wasn't too much emotion in this one. It sounded like you were just reading a script. A lot of times if you're overacting, you're really not... and if you are, it's easier to tone it down than to dial it up. PS: This didn't hurt your score but Instead of "injection", the word you're looking for is "syringe". Figured I would let you know for the future!

Shozi responds:

hey thanks alot for that review! im lookin forward to get better =D thank you very much !

[A Night to Remember]

"A Night to Remember" by moonvamp*******************4th

*****BEST ACTING********

Acting- 50/50
Range- 24/25
Fit- 25/25
Mixing- 18/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 9/15
TOTAL- 140/150

Comments: There is some background noise from your computer and some dead air as well. Very good job getting the energy needed to make the characters come to life. The voices were great. I was a little confused as to what was going on. Correct me if I'm wrong, a hero gets into a trap, the villain has sharp body hair and is trying to get rid of it then dies by getting grinded by his thug and the sidekick gets turned into a peach? Lastly, I can see why this would be a memorable night, but it didn't seem like the central theme of the skit. Overall, getting acquainted with some good sound removal software may do some good for you. Other than that you did a great job!

moonvamp responds:

Thank you. I will have to get introduced to some sound removal software for any future recordings. As for the plot, it's basically this:

The heroes, Stimey Buttons and Rocko, are caught in a trap set up by Plushie McGee. Plushie has been frustrated with how his body hair is so hideously sharp, and how everyone he happens to meet tells him he's a peach (which he despises peach). So, he made a ray gun to turn everyone within the town limits into peaches that have even more hideous and sharper body hair. Rocko questions his logic and gets bitch-slapped by him using a dog. So, as Plushie goes to prepare the gun, he leaves Dr. Gravis, his henchman with the cheese grinder hand, to finish off the heroes. He decides to use a cat that can cough up an acid hairball lazer. As Dr. Gravis is distracted by his love for hefty women from his magazine and Rocko wakes up, Stimey finds a way to escape from their predicament by finding out the bar supports are on the verge of breaking. Rocko then finds a good distraction for the cat by finding cat nip (Stimey's supposed future meal) in Stimey's pockets. Stimey is able to reach the cat nip, and the cat stops his catball barrage by approaching the duo. The cat soon salivates acid at a slow pace from the cat nip, melting the hand cuffs of the trap just in time for Stimey to break his hands free. He punches the cat, and thrusts his body to try and break the bar supports. Eventually they do, and the duo are soon free. Plushie sees them, and calls for Dr. Gravis. Dr. Gravis is so fixated on his Hefty Honeys magazine that he tries to *place sexual act here*. However, he uses his cheese grinder hand, and his *special place* is in pain. Dr. Gravis soon approaches Plushie with his stuck cheese grinder hand, and as it breaks free, the cheese grinder hand goes out of control and slices them both. Stimey sees that all Plushie needed to do for another alternative was to use Dr. Gravis's cheese grinder hand since his body hair was immediately trimmed off in the grueling process. While they were distracted, Rocko went straight for the ray guy and halts it from firing upon the town. However, it also malfunctioned and turned him into a peach with supposedly sharp body hair. Screams then ensure.

Well, that was basically the gist of it.

[A Night To Remember!]

"A Night To Remember!" by Ragnar4200*

******BEST FIT*******

Acting- 49/50
Range- 25/25
Fit- 25/25
Mixing- 17/20
Originality- 14/15
Writing- 10/15
TOTAL- 140/150

Comments: There was a bit of dead air and a little bit of clipping. I loved the diversity in your voices. The computer was definitely my favorite. Great job with getting into your characters. As far as acting goes, the only thing I would change is adding more "umph" into the yelling by Sato. Lastly, I could see that it would have been a memorable night, but it didn't seem like the main theme o the skit. Other than those few minor things there wasn't a whole lot to complain about. My biggest suggestion would be to turn down the gain using a preamp or use a mic with a sound pad built in. Great job!

Ragnar4200 responds:

I'll be sure to take your criticisms and apply them for the next VO Contest. It was a lot of fun and I look forward to doing more in the future! :D

[Zane's Night To Remember]

"Zane's Night To Remember" by JayMyers*

Acting- 39/50
Range- 20/25
Fit- 23/25
Mixing- 14/20
Originality- 13/15
Writing- 14/15
TOTAL- 123/150

Comments: There was a ton of clipping and pops and reverb. To be honest I'm not sure what the hell I just listened to. haha. There was definitely energy here. The best voice was Roger. There wasn't a whole lot to this. Overall, it wasn't bad on acting, but I really would have liked to heard some more diverse voices rather than you in different falsettos. Maybe next time try something that involves more character acting and mixing. PS: is your accent from Boston, Australia, Ireland or...? PPS: Zane's a dick. lol

JayMyers responds:

Thanks; as for as my accent goes, I have no clue. It's like a mix. If you're wondering where I'm actually from, it's Wales. Oh, and yeah, Zane is meant to be the lowest of the low.

[A Knight To Remember]

"A Knight To Remember" by ZipZipper*****************1st

******BEST MIXING*******
******BEST WRITING*******

Acting- 49/50
Range- 25/25
Fit- 22/25
Mixing- 19/20
Originality- 13/15
Writing- 15/15
TOTAL- 142/150

Comments: Hahaha... it's funny cuz it's a pun. The Joker sounded more like Zasz. I really liked the voice choices otherwise, particularly Roger's. This entire skit was actually pretty creative, even incorporating the impressions. The acting was pretty impressive although I would have liked to hear even more exclamation in the exclamations. The mix job was great as well. I might have found a better way to introduce the Joker because at first I thought Roger randomly pulled a knife. Overall, this was even better than the last contest so great job on improving. I'd definitely like to work with you in a project at some point.

ZipZipper responds:

You want to work with me on something someday??? ajfhdsajfhsajkdhsjk!!!