Your videos are some of the most badass shit I've seen in a long time. Great job and keep them coming!
Lots of Potential
The animation style was like Rocky & Bullwinkle with an art style from Ren and Stimpy. I personally would like to see a more smooth animation style. Also, next time you do an animation, feel free to contact me for a voice over or find someone with a quality mic. The audio quality was probably the biggest let down.
Overall, enjoyed it! Looking forward to more from you.
Excellent animation skills
Great job animating! But may I suggest scouting some voice actors. The narrator did a great job, but yourself and the other girl who voiced sound very very alike. I understand it's a fun thing between you and your friends, so i don't expect you to make changes, but if you do decide to go above and beyond, try finding more voices, maybe get some more help writing the script, etc...
Criticism aside, great job overall!
Keep it going!
I absolutely love these games. If you were to spend even more time on it to make it deeper than just a browser game, I'd consider buying it. The only critique I have is that the church starts killing off your people way too fast, screws up everything and you have no way to stop it. other than that, great job!
After passing the part where you have to put to rocks down on those buttons, the game can glitch if you try and go back. The little guy just fell down into nothingness and there's nothing to do but start again.
Otherwise, good game. Enjoyed the puzzles. not too hard, but not easy either.
"Acting Contest 11" by Zolen
Acting - 21/50
Fit - 11/25
Mixing - 7/20
Originality - 10/15
Comments: You're overloading the mic. Try backing up more from it. You also have something like a fan running in the background? At times it seemed like you were scripted and recorded your lins separately, but other times it sounded improvised and like you recorded without cutting. Script the entire thing with just a bit of improv here and there and always record each line separately. This skit was very hard to follow. Partly do to the audio/mixing quality, but also because the script seemed all over the place. I didn't see how this was related to the first time for anything. I read your description and saw it was the first time for the kid to be kidnapped, but he wasn't even the main voice and the only mention of anything being the first time was the kid driving a robot(?) which he didn't even do. The voices were very similar in range except the kid's which just sounded like an older guy trying to do a kid's voice. The acting was lackluster. I could tell you were trying, but I could tell you were reading from a script. It should make me believe you are the character and not think about the fact it's someone else acting as one. Overall, I know this is pretty much all negative, but don't take it as a "you suck so give up" type of thing. You do have to start somewhere. Hang around voice acting forums and talk to people who have been doing it a while for tips and obviously keep practicing.
So, I had no idea what was the beginning, middle, or end. I had no clear indication of who the characters were as characters. Yes, you could do a higher-pitched voice, but that was about it as far as range goes. The lines sounded like you were saying them as they came along; there was a lot of open space and lines that dragged on. I was not really sure what sort of first time this was for anyone in this story. Overall, it just sounds like you didn’t put much clear thought into this submission. Maybe next time.
The voices were really difficult to distinguish, exept for the few whose tone you completely changed. Your diction made it nearly impossible to understand what was happening in the scene.
You did try to show a wide range, but the execution was poor.
The main voice you used could be a very nice one to have in your arsenal with some work, but the others did nothing to showcase your voice.
There was significant ambient noise as well as some mouth noise and plosives.
What I could understand of the concept sounded like it would be fun to explore.
Most of the lines sounded like improv, which affected the pacing and overall storyline, leaving it feeling like you weren't sure where the plot was going.
"Meeting Aunty" by Orias1992
Acting - 30/50
Fit - 22/25
Mixing - 11/20
Originality - 11/15
Comments: There was a lot of distortion in the audio. The acting was a little uninspired, especially with the "normal" voice. Tommy and the normal character were very similar save for the gayness. At times it sounded like you switched between voices without cutting. When you did cut, there were pauses that were just a little too long between lines. Also, I'm kind of assuming this was supposed to be the first time he met the aunt, but it was never eluded to. Your audio is distorted either because of your mic or you used some sort of noise reduction. When you listen to your acting, you can tell you were just reading a script instead of becoming the characters. Put yourself in that situation. When you looked for the cat, would you just say "oh no. fuck that". Probably not. You'd more likely say "*Gasp* Oh... oh nooo... FUCK that!" You had some very overused tropes for voices. The aunt and uncle weren't bad. The uncle was probably my favorite. Overall, the audio needs cleaned up and I think you'd do a lot better if you spend some time before recording, really getting into the characters. Scream, jump around, physically act it out, make faces in the mirror... whatever you need to do to get into it.
This could have seriously benefitted from at least some underlying victrola music to keep the wonky mood going. Some of the lines I thought were quite funny and I actually thought your range was pretty good, especially with aunty and uncle. The mixing was probably the biggest problem, as well as the pacing. It mostly sounded like you were acting through the entire piece in one recording. Recording lines separately and occasionally having them overlap one another keeps realness to the conversation. The story itself was okay, a little disjointed but I got the general gist. It could have been a little more creative as well, but overall I thought this was pretty complete as a story; all it needs is more technical work. Nice job!
The pacing was off throughout, which is a shame because the actual lines were quite funny. More energy was needed overall to sell the absurdity of the scene. The straight man character especially fell flat.
While the range was wide, the execution was not solid enough to sell that many characters.
Many times you fell out of character, or lost the vocal qualities that should define each character.
The audio was quite distorted. It sounded as though you may not have been using a pop-filter. There were many plosives, and many of your breaths seemed to hit the mic hard.
I really enjoyed the scene and the idea you were going for.
The writing was great! Very funny moments,great cast of characters
"Voice Acting Contest 11 Entry" by Synectics
Acting - 40/50
Fit - 18/25
Mixing - 19/20
Originality - 5/15
Comments: Your diction needs a little work. You had a good amount of voices and I could differentiate them all. I would have liked to heard a voice that disguised your own more. I think this was more noticeable to me since most of these were impersonations. When you do them, they need to be pretty spot on and while yours were decent, they weren't exactly right. I also didn't really hear a lot of originality from the voices you did to your mixing which had only the reverb effect. Normally, simplicity in mixing would be fine, but it really just seemed like you sat down, recorded and exported instead of taking the time to come up with something. Also, this started with the central theme of "My First" and came back to it once, but it would have been better to have stuck with the theme through most of it. Overall, you had a nice sound quality and the mixing was fine since there wasn't much, but it seemed pretty tame, creatively. You have a nice voice for acting casual characters from what I could hear between the impressions. I really think you have the talent to voice act. Just next time, spend extra time on your script and mixing and use some original voices.
Hmmm...I have to say the concept seemed like a good idea at first, but then I noticed it derailed in many directions. Without any concrete plot, it was hard to tell what character was being portrayed. It makes it difficult to have to analyze each individual line for its own merits within its own context rather than listening in connection to a story. Of course, some of your voices I thought were pretty cool. It sounded like you were trying to do some impersonations, most evidently the Scooby-Doo at the end, but they weren’t exactly spot-on, which is understandable I mean I can’t do any impersonation to save my life. But your mixing was very clear, and you had a great walking out effect at the end that I really liked. I could tell you put work into creating these character voices, but there were too many to keep track of for trying to do a farce on the theme like this. You have a good voice for voice acting, now I think you just need work focusing it. Good work!
Watch your diction and breath sounds. A little more energy would have served you well, since the chaos of the situaion was the root of most of the humor.The overall energy of the piece just fell flat, and killed the momentum. The characters' interactions felt disconnected, and as a listener I was aware that you were talking to yourself.
All of the characters felt appropriate, branching from your natural sound. Their execution left a little to be desired.
Many of the characters were inconsistant, and I could hear your natural voice come through the characterization. In this case, I would have preferred three spot on characters you can nail, rather than many characters you can do ok with.
The characters coming in and out were nicely mixed. I would have liked some music or SFX to help sell the scene. There was some ambient noise, as well. Nothing too crazy, but worth noting.
The actual dialogue was orignal, but the concept is pretty standard for showing off a range of characters.
It sounded more like improv than writing, especially in the beginning. You started to find your stride toward the end.
This upset me greatly...
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